Criticize my first amateur movie please

[Querorz]

Hey guys,

Fatih, from Turkey. I did a 45 days fishing trip in the USA in 2015. I finally could learn Premiere Pro and finished my episode 1.

I know it is not very good but can you tell me the obvious mistakes i made in this movie please? So i can change and make the final version.



I didn't use any effects , other than unsharp mask. I don't know if i should use some color adjustments on footage. I want it to look all natural but no effect doesn't mean more natural.

Videos were shot with Go Pro and Lumix Fz-200.

Thank you.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mXF2F3uXR6Q

[Querorz]

Hey guys .

[bendixG15]

It's a great home movie ......hope you enjoyed your trip

[netmask56]

I think the expression "a critique" is a more descriptive title!

[raffriff42]

Okay, first I am enjoying the video. I don't understand a word, but you seem to be enjoying yourself, and you make me want to be there too.
- start is strong. Good use of music and fast motion.
- but it's feeling a little lonely... aren't there other people around?
- it maybe could do some random cutaways - sky, birds, trees, whatever - to break up the long scenes and perhaps imply passage of time.
- 10:24 jump cut! Perfect place for a cutaway...

[Querorz]

bendix thanks man. I really enjoyed it a lot .

netmask, i am not a native speaker. So , it's ok ) .

Rafriff, thanks for the help again man. I added 1 more scenery clip after you told. I don't have much footage of other things for this episode. And i can't do anything about cut time. I mean i have been working on this for weeks already. I am done .