proofread my speech!

[Shaorin]

Hi can anyone proofread my speech? it's a powerpoint presentation so I only copied the text parts:

Background/Concept

The intended project will house itself in the Trickster Online environment. Trickster Online is a Massive Multiplayer Online Role-playing Game (MMORPG) that allows numerous gamers to participate in an evolving virtual world via the internet.

The primary objective of this project is to create an informative CD-Rom that should educate new users as to the knowledge and skills required to interact successfully within the "Trickster Online" gameplay module.

The reason I chose to do Trickster Online is I think it's a very cute game to play especially for girls. Boys may think it's too cutesy because of the way the graphics are designed.

Content (including multimedia elements)

The content will include 20 pages or more of instructive material - the bulk of it being self explanatory images. Added to this, there will be 2 interfaces the first of which will be the home page and the latter being an individual section dedicated to a specific topic. It will contain a video clip and it's a trailer but it's in Korean language so If I can find someone who knows Korean I might be able to translate it. The clip will be in AVI file format which was downloaded from the official website. I'll also add some music.

Interactive Elements

The navigation panel/elements will have rollover effects. Sound control panels at the bottom of the interface will assist the user in disabling the audio elements whenever he/she has a desire. I'll modify the rollover member change to make it jump to a marker when you click on the button. It will have some animations in some pages.

Target Audience/Platform

The Interactive CD-Rom is focused on individuals 10 years and up. Because the official game targeted to teenagers so I thought I'd do the same. The Interactive CD-Rom will be designed to run on P.C. that have slow CPU speeds because not everyone has a fast computer. CD-roms on the user’s PC is a requirement with CD-rom speeds of 52x and more so as to allow a smooth run of the application. CD-rom speeds lower than 52x will result in a non-responsive application. Screen resolution has been fixed at 1024 by 768. The application will not have a standard title bar but will compensate with an exit button on the interface.

[Abbadon]

Hi,

A couple of things you should consider:

1. CD-Rom instead of CD-rom

2. Try avoiding repetitive words.

3. Replace P.C. with PC

Instead of "whenever he/she has a desire.", try "whenever he/she has the desire.

P.S.
I am not a native speaker, so any correction is welcome.